A Reflection of Loneliness

Category: Writers Block

Post 1 by Chels666 (I can't call it a day til I enter the zone BBS) on Friday, 11-Feb-2005 11:23:18

Hey everyone! Here's my poem. I just wrote last night, and I don't think it's all that good. It's just a little something I kinda threw together, but it works I guess. Let me know what you think... "A Reflection of Loneliness..." I peer into the mirror of my soul a quick glance is all I need isolation has planted the seed from wich my loneliness grows though no one ever knows they pass me by with out a glance never giving me the propper chance the chance to be the chance to grow the chance to see the chance to know my lonely eyes flood with tears bitter drops of sadness accompany my fears do I exist? am I here? am I someone's fantacy? someone's dream?I close my eyes and try to scream is life really as it seems?

Post 2 by Goblin (I have proven to myself and the world that I need mental help) on Friday, 11-Feb-2005 11:27:55

Chels666 This is very gothic you have really captured the depth of desire and need good work, it could almost be a song...there are aspects of it that remind me of Sopor Aeternus and that's no bad thing...smile.

Post 3 by crazy_cat (Just a crazy cat) on Friday, 11-Feb-2005 11:41:11

For a poem that was just thrown together it sounds really good. It really captures the feeling of loniness that I think everyone feels at some point in their lives. Keep up the good work!

Post 4 by The Wicked Witch of The East (we deserve each other) on Friday, 11-Feb-2005 12:18:58

*snap* *snap* *snap* that was very good. was it ment to be a slam poem?

Post 5 by Chels666 (I can't call it a day til I enter the zone BBS) on Friday, 11-Feb-2005 12:53:26

I don't know. lol couldn't tell ya. lol

Post 6 by Caitlin (I've now got the silver prolific poster award! wahoo!) on Saturday, 12-Feb-2005 14:41:13

I like it. Very good and very ... well said. i was kind of singing it in my head, like a song? Lol. For thrown together it's awesome girl! Keep it up...